Analysis of one sequence from rough cut

From my music video, I am going to analyse the last 1.25 seconds. This sequence needs to be redited as it doesn't make sense, nor look good. This is the worst part of the rough cut, which needs to be majorly improved, in our feedback, most people found it to be the worst part of the music video too. Simply because it didn't make sense and brought down the whole feel of the music video.

To make this whole sequence look better, we should take all of those last shots out and replace them with lighter, intresting ones. These shots should follow the storyboard almost, which would then correspond with the rest of the viceo. I think that by adding cut aways of the circles and the clocks which are our motifts, this will create a better look to the music video and enchance whatever good sequences we have so far. Also by having the sub stories at the end in a dual screen perhaps reninforce thier roles in the music video.